I like spring use spring is so beautiful!It's spring so warm and sunny.I like go on a picnic in spring.I often go to a park is read books on sangwich is my favonrite k tea is my the spring is cool. Today is spring last a a kite is a is the beautiful spring.I with my fried and my parents together hug you,spring!
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I like spring best because spring is so beautiful! It's warm and sunny in spring, so I can have a picnic with my family and friends. We often go to park at weekends. We bring lots of food and drinks. My favorite food issandwiches and I like tea best. We can also enjoy reading there. And we often fly kites there. We have a great time! I love spring!
修改老師：Crystal 老師
六年級:楊怡蕊