There are many people in our are our ofen help for example,first,with thehelp of them we make progress in our nd,they ofen bring many funny for also take away many bad so ey play a very important part in our lives.I also have many ofen help and encourageeach ,I think we should choose some frends who can help you and get along well with.
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Everyone needs friends. They often help us a lot. Firstly,with thehelp of them we can make progress in our study. Secondly, they often bring us lots of laughters. And they can share our sorrow, too. They play a very important role in our lives. I have many friends. We ofen help and encourageeach other. So, I think we should make more friends and get along well with them.
修改老師：Crystal老師
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