Hi,every one ,my name is Vivian Chinese name is Sun Jingyi. Last weekend was Saturday moring ,I did my homework and slept noon,I watched TV,it'very funny the afternoon ,Iwent to the Zhong Shan Ｐａｒｋ．Ｉｔ＇ｓ ｓｏ ｇｒｅａｔ！
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Hi, every one, my name is Vivian. My Chinese name is Sun Jingyi. Last weekend I was happy. On Saturday moring, I did my homework and went sleeping. At noon, I watched TV which was very funny. In the afternoon, I went to the Zhong Shan Park and I had a great time there.
I like my weekend.
修改老師：Crystal 老師
六年級:sunkun